以“My Dream, My Path”为主题，写一篇120词左右的英语文章，参与“校园活动助力梦想”的征稿。

1.           What's your dream? Why?

问题：

(1)漏掉了why这个要点，或者把这2点分开写）

(2)把一个具体目标（如：中考考高分）或者一个具体任务（如：制作一个宣传视频）当成了梦想；

(3)梦想太大，太空泛，如保护环境/地球.

2.How/which school activities helped you with your dream? （要描写2个活动如何帮助你追求梦想，而不是详细描述你如何参加一次活动）

3.What will you do next? （要描写实现梦想的计划或途径path， 而不是描写梦想的意义）

审题：

人称：第一人称

时态：3个段落3个不同的时态

体裁：征稿

重点段落：第2,3段

Everyone has a dream. So do I我也一样. Mine我的梦想 is to become a paper-cutting master大师, for因为 this amazing traditional art has attracted吸引 me deeply since自从 l was eight years old. Besides, paper-cutting is a gem珍宝 of traditional Chinese art, so因此 I’m eager to渴望 help pass it down把它传承下去.

Here is a brief introduction to the school activities that helped me get closer to接近 my dream. In Grade Seven, l participated in参加 the School Art Festival艺术节 paper-cutting competition比赛 and won second prize, which greatly boosted my confidence增强信心 in keeping it alive把它传承下去. In Grade Eight, the School Paper-cutting Club invited me to share skills with other paper-cutting lovers and create delicate works精美作品 for the School Open Day开放日. That experience helped me improve my cutting skills in a meaningful way.

I will spare no effort to不遗余力 fulfill my dream实现梦想, and my plans are as follows如下. First, l will learn from professional职业的 paper-cutting masters大师 to polish my skills去提升技巧. Second, l will keep practicing paper-cutting in my spare time every day. Third, l will take part in more art activities艺术活动 related to与。。。相关的 paper-cutting. With dedication and creativity凭借执着与创造力, I believe I can forge a path to my dream为梦想开辟一条道路, spreading传播 this ancient art to the world.